It's the same one I'm always working on, but after some time away, I couldn't figure out how Failure or Success might affect what I was trying to say (Letting fear hold you back leads to regret; Courage leads to fulfilment. Either way, I want MC Change, Judgment of Good). Wasn't sure if the message was baked in the storyform or if it depended on whether I encoded the Goal as something positive like characters want to feel content about themselves or maybe being performers is the thing that will give them fulfillment (I've been thinking of performing as the stuff they are doing), or as something negative they can let go of like living up to perfectionistic self-expectations. I did read Jim's article on Story Nature in case Nature could help me determine the best Outcome for my message, but the article felt really abstract to me that late at night.
I could see giving up on negative stuff as either giving up on a negative Goal, which is good, or a Solution to get to a positive Goal, also good.
I also try to think of the initial inequity to extrapolate the goal's phrasing from that, but have trouble since I ended up with an MC with issues of Worry like I have, so how I see the initial inequity is very focused on MC feeling imbalanced by it rather than both characters (a third important character comes into the picture a bit later). MC's been living as a hermit no one knows about for a long time, then IC stumbles on his home. MC observes the stranger using "futuristic" gadgets and wonders what's out there, starts to pine for unfulfilled dreams, wondering what could've been if he hadn't taken this path and tried to solve his anxiety by hiding from the world. MC is tempted to reach out, but afraid that change might make things worse, so he tries to scare IC away and it backfires, leading to them meeting. I don't think this unbalances IC, but IC sees an opportunity to get fame or whatever, which doesn't sound like an inequity like MC has. So, I don't know if I picked the wrong event to be initial inequity or if I need to modify it or what.
From my subjective POV, I see accomplishing my dreams as key to fulfilment and feeling better about myself instead of worrying about failure and unfulfillment, which is why I think of external stuff for the Goal like if my MC dreams of having lots of friends or being able to do a useful job, then he wants those things. I mean, the point of those external things is feeling good about oneself, but I don't know if that's Being either.