Sorry I couldn't help in time.
I saw you were using the Prediction quad (because she knew something bad was going to happen - that was the source of conflict?) with the skeleton notes at the end to flesh out the four elements. Were you using the interdiction quad in the bit that you'd written more of? I thought there was desire and ability in the nightclub scene. I guess, thinking about it some more, I can also see Situation and Past (the bit that seemed like backstory)?
It was fairly easy to read. I think you definitely ticked the ON A TRAIN part, but you didn't actually have anything that was frozen - only nearly frozen and would have been frozen, I think.
Thanks for sharing.
EDIT: Having my subconscious whirring in the background, it just occurred to me that you never mentioned explicitly if the protagonist was a man or a woman. At first I'd assumed it was a man (I guess because, traditionally - that's the kind of person you're more likely to witness being on the outside of a train [not in real life, of course] - and then tutted at myself for being sexist - when the "my husband" phrase made me assume it was a woman. But now, with the Donald and Dick comment at the end, I assume that it is a man, again - so I'm tutting at myself for being sexual-orientationist. This seems like a good example that people bring their own assumptions to stories.