Hey, @emm, sorry I didn’t get back around today.
I’m glad @mlucas and @Lakis jumped back in because I feel like we were kind of starting to split into two directions with what we were doing and I was going to suggest we back up and get in one track. So let’s follow their lead and work out the OS thread. I like how you answered Lakis’ question with lots of detail about your OS characters. And I want you to answer Mike’s question next ( “So what happens with all these people in the story?”), but I want you to do it with what we’ve been talking about in mind. So I’m going to go ahead and summarize what I’ve been telling you. This shouldn’t take too long.
Your storyform is about finding the source of inequity, or the source of your problem, in your story.
In order to show your audience (right now, that’s me, @Lakis, and @mlucas ) that there’s a problem, you need two things. A process from the Dramatica chart (everything on there is a process, even the ones referred to as states) and the conflict that stems from that process and proves that process to be problematic. When you have those two, you should be able to find your throughline or Concern or issue or whatever at least little easier. So when you tell Mike what happens with all these people, try to keep that in mind.
I’m going to give you a quick example using Mitch’s mother.
Right now, the way it’s worded, you’re really just giving us information about Mitch’s mother. There’s no problem there to put into a Dramatica storyform because there’s nothing inherently wrong with smoking forty cigarettes a day. You need to prove to us that doing that is a problem. In order to do that, I’m going to use your same information, but I’m going to present it in a slightly different way.
-Mitch’s mother had a habit of smoking forty cigs a day (Process) which gave her emphazema and eventually took her life (Conflict).
Do you see the difference? The way you said it simply let us know that she had emphazema and smoked a lot. The way I said it let us know that smoking eventually killed her.
Does that make sense? If so, go ahead and answer Mike. You don’t have to put Process and Conflict in parentheses if you don’t want, but I think it was serving you well earlier.
(Hope I didn’t get in your way with that, Mike or Lakis!)