# AH Throughlines for feedback

**URL:** <https://discuss.dramatica.com/t/ah-throughlines-for-feedback/3186>\
**Category:** workshop\
**Created:** [November 5, 2020, 1:42am UTC](https://discuss.dramatica.com/t/ah-throughlines-for-feedback/3186 "2020-11-05T01:42:56Z")\
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**Author:** ![jassnip](https://yyz2.discourse-cdn.com/flex010/user_avatar/discuss.dramatica.com/jassnip/32/452_2.png) [@jassnip](https://discuss.dramatica.com/u/jassnip)\
**Post date:** [November 5, 2020, 1:42am UTC](https://discuss.dramatica.com/t/ah-throughlines-for-feedback/3186/1 "2020-11-05T01:42:56Z")

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Okay, so based on the work we did in the Conflict Corner today (11/4/20). I made the following Throughline Synopsis (which I had never used before). I’d really love for y’all to take a look and give me feedback: if it feels weak anywhere, not enough emotional notes, did I use the right element pieces. Do I just not get it yet and it’s a fail? Just anything ya got, hit me with.

TIA,

 ![AH Throughline Synopsis](https://canada1.discourse-cdn.com/flex010/uploads/dramatica/original/2X/7/79bcfce326becef3102b74c4926e241fea92ca00.png)

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**Author:** ![MWollaeger](https://yyz2.discourse-cdn.com/flex010/user_avatar/discuss.dramatica.com/mwollaeger/32/82_2.png) [@MWollaeger](https://discuss.dramatica.com/u/MWollaeger)\
**Post date:** [November 5, 2020, 9:03am UTC](https://discuss.dramatica.com/t/ah-throughlines-for-feedback/3186/2 "2020-11-05T09:03:23Z")

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These get difficult without context. But, thinking of methods might help improve some.

MC: Needs emotion and neither one is really in the form of justifying a behavior.  
Quarantining a character for research purposes builds trust UNLESS Scouring the town for for sick babies brings Disgust.

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**Author:** ![mlucas](https://yyz2.discourse-cdn.com/flex010/user_avatar/discuss.dramatica.com/mlucas/32/275_2.png) [@mlucas](https://discuss.dramatica.com/u/mlucas)\
**Post date:** [November 5, 2020, 10:34pm UTC](https://discuss.dramatica.com/t/ah-throughlines-for-feedback/3186/3 "2020-11-05T22:34:25Z")

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Hi Diane, just offhand I would say the IC one is a little complicated. What about something simple like:

You should fear punishment in order to protect a loved one, unless you need to crave family contact in order to be reunited.

Jim’s idea of going to Concern level may also help here.

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**Author:** ![jassnip](https://yyz2.discourse-cdn.com/flex010/user_avatar/discuss.dramatica.com/jassnip/32/452_2.png) [@jassnip](https://discuss.dramatica.com/u/jassnip)\
**Post date:** [November 5, 2020, 10:43pm UTC](https://discuss.dramatica.com/t/ah-throughlines-for-feedback/3186/4 "2020-11-05T22:43:26Z")

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I was very much trying to use the “Influence by \_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_” wording. Btw, I just noticed your DSE designation. Congratulations!