So what would Progress in the Os be?
The spa being shut down. Making progress on the pitch. The company trying to expand operations. The tide of public opinion changing. The FDA whittling down the cloning division.
Those all spring to mind.
I don’t remember specifics about some of these. What conflict comes from the spa being shut down? From Progress being made in the pitch (doesn’t seem like they make progress so much as just accept what nM tosses out)? From the FDA being whittled down?
I would say that Progress shows up in the OS mostly when we are talking about the family. They establish in the episode where Kate is the focus that they moved to the suburbs to grow and start a family. They are making no progress.
It’s not a Present problem, they aren’t having trouble being a family per se—they’re not having trouble paying this month’s rent, or buying food. But Kate is fed up and things are headed in a bad direction. Miles not going to get his sperm tested is not a present problem—it’s a refusal to make progress. Also, Miles isn’t progressing in his job, and when New Miles shows up and is making progress that actually creates problems.
At work, Old Miles has a presentation to decipher and he can’t make any progress on it. The success of the pitch is tied to a promotion: progress within the company.
Ok, got it. Now I’m on board there, too.
Progress is always a bit weird to suss out since all movies progress (and get worse) as the story builds.
Who wants to take a stab at the Issues?
I’m forgetting a good bit of it at this point, but what stands out to me most in the OS is Threat-the Miles’ threatening to report the spa, the FDA vaguely threatening Miles, and the competitor at the vote threatening a lawsuit.
I can see that. Dan being threatened by New Miles getting the spotlight. How do you feel about the elements under that thought? Do you feel strong about Theory / Hunch / Determination / Expectation?
I think Skill is pretty strong for Miles, since he actually isn’t very skilled at what he wants to do (his play stinks). I don’t know how I feel about Effect / Cause / Test / Trust though.
Those sound a lot like subject matter to me. But, subject matter and issues (don’t quote me) seem to show up together a lot. So let’s run with this.
We can’t have Threat/Skill as a thematic combo!
We have a couple of choices here.
We can pick one of the dynamic pairs associated with Threat or Skill (since most thematic arguments are usually explored with point/counterpoint) and see if that helps us think.
Or, we can look to the issues below each one and see if that helps us think.
I’ll let you choose…
I know. That’s why I was asking if he felt good about the problem elements under threat.
I think Threat / Security (more like insecurity) are strong for OS.
Fact and Fantasy are there too.
The whole pitch is kind of this imaginary, dream world where we’re all a big family, when really it’s for a company run by a guy who sold an innocent kid out to Nazis so he could get more food.
I’ll have to wait until I can look at elements again though.
Okay. Looking at the elements chart over a coffee this morning, I think I have a better idea of things now.
I’d put Miles in Experience / Skill and the OS in Threat / Security.
That puts new Miles in Desire with a drive of Ending. He doesn’t want his “old life” to end. That feels strong.
I think we kind of covered the issues, but what I think is really strong here are the Expectation and Determination elements.
Miles has all the expectations of what his life should have been, he’s falling short of expectations at work. He moves to realizing that it’s not about all of that, he can just be happy on his own terms and be there for his wife. He determines his own happiness.
OS Solution of Determination feels strong too. They can’t determine who the father is. They’re stuck together. They have to come together for the family. (Two Dads and one Mom? How _progress_ive. )
Then you have a relationship problem of trust (trusting each other to keep up their end of the deal, betrayals of trust)
I admit, I’m finding it harder and harder to remember examples, but that feels like a nice arrangement.
What do you guys think?
ETA: If you’re away from your computer, this storyform is the same as Spider-verse.
I like a lot of what you said, especially [quote=“glennbecker, post:161, topic:2652”]
OS Solution of Determination feels strong too. They can’t determine who the father is
So now we’re going to have to have a conversation, because my gut took me the other direction:
I started by putting New Miles into Psychology>Being>Ability because it’s his ability to do things with such ease that makes him such a foil for Old Miles.
This forces Old Miles into Activity>Doing>Skill, which also felt good because we know Miles has it in him (he’s been nominated for the Golden Pencil before) but he’s having trouble accessing it. It also seemed to fit with his sperm test: does he have the potential to be a father?
I want to go back and add that I also have these choices that we’ve never talked about:
• Change (he goes from being a lump on a log to someone who can destroy a credenza)
• Male (If I send New Miles to work, then I can write my play)
• Optionlock (They are clearly trying out arrangements to see what will work.)
• Good (They all smile and hug after the Mileses got their anger out with a fistfight. I’m not 100% on this)
I don’t have •Success• chosen because… what’s the Story Goal again? I have an idea, but we haven’t addressed it, and this is where I think the show falters. I suspect this will be •Success•, but we’ll get there.
Anyway, all of this prevents me from choosing OS Issue>Threat.
I’m down to four storyforms now.
In the OS, I like the feel of Process/Result because:
• The problem seems like it comes from the screwed up results from the spa. And,
• Old Miles (who I see as Protagonist) is trying to figure out a Process by which he can benefit from the existence of the New Miles.
But I don’t like Effect/Cause in the Problem/Solution spots.
I should add that the reason I haven’t picked Success is that I don’t think Old Miles achieved his goal of figuring out how to live with New Miles.
Unless “we destroy the credenza together” is representing something like destroying the old family unit (Kate + Miles) and ushering in a new era.
I mean, I do think that’s what they’re saying with that. But I don’t see how this actually solves their problem—I don’t feel convinced they know how to live together.
I think it might be better to think of it as moving forward together. They don’t know where it’s going or how it’s going to work, but stopping the fighting, backstabbing and lies and they are choosing to move forward together as a family.
I started coming around to Expectation in the OS when I thought about the backstory episode. I think you mentioned that the marriage was more OS than RS. That episode is all about setting up all these great expectations for the future that don’t end up panning out. We’ll move to suburbs, I’ll become a big shot writer, we’ll start our family and make this the baby room.
I could see the crucial elements both ways
- Old Miles wants to figure out a process to benefit from New Miles. New Miles is actually getting the results
- Old Miles just expects that New Miles is doing what he’s saying and that he’ll reap all the benefits. New Miles is determined to steal the wife away and get his old life back.
I do like Accurate / Non-Accurate for Miles symptom and response. Anytime things aren’t going exactly how he wants he lashes out.
I don’t think destroying the credenza is a MC Change thing. He takes out his aggression on inanimate objects throughout the show (the lightbulb, the matchstick eiffel tower, the credenza). Plus that feels more like a Be-er to Do-er change to me.
Also, the reason he can’t let new Miles leave is because the company expects him to deliver this pitch that he can’t understand.
Reading back over the thread and this jumped out. This really feels like the moment between Miles and his Dad in Spider-verse. That “I don’t care who you are or what you do, as long as you’re happy” moment.
I also remembered the wanna-be CEO guy and his high standards for marble tiles setting the wife off. Wasn’t that kind of a “grow up, we don’t always get what we want” kind of moment? She goes to the dating site because her needs aren’t being met.
Can you think of any Cause/Effect or Expectation examples @greg? Or did you have a strong feeling one way or the other?
Guys, if he is a Change character and his reaction to finding out that New Miles slept with Kate… is it possible that Old Miles changes into a Do-er?
That makes him a Start character.
I’ve always felt strongly about start, so that would be good.
I feel like we made a pretty convincing case for Doer though.
I know he lies to his wife about the money, he keeps telling Kate he’ll go to the clinic and then doesn’t, he pretends to be one of the farmers, there’s all the stuff with him not writing. Is watching porn instead of working a be-er thing?
Hmm, I don’t know. Do you have a good Be-er argument, @MWollaeger ?
I don’t. One might exist, but I don’t want to go back and watch the show to find it!
Ha! I hear ya. I know @Greg was pushing for be-er initially. Maybe he has some examples.
I thought the suicide attempt was a good Be-er / Ending thing with New Miles.
He’s grown in his motivation of Ending from not wanting his old life to end, to breaking up the marriage, to just wanting to end it all. But he can’t bring himself to do it. He keeps thinking of the mess he’s going to leave. So, then he tries to get old Miles to lose his sh-t and do it for him. (Preconscious consequence?)
Then old Miles is unable to do it. They smash the credenza. I think this is more of an RS moment. Then there’s that moment of, what are we going to do now? We’re at a standstill.
It’s not until the wife says she’s pregnant and they can’t determine who is the father that they all come together. I think the change is Old Miles reacts the same way to the news as New Miles. He’s excited and supportive. He’s determined to make it work.
You still get the Skill / Ability issues as counterpoints (maybe that’s one reason the story feels wonky)
I don’t see Proven / Unproven as strongly for new Miles.
This is all assuming we’re good with my previous arguments.