Story Assembly -- Putting it all to work

ok and do you know that it is impossible to just post OK as an answer because one needs at least 20 characters? fyi

Okay, I’m gonna go with #2.

MB is trying to step away from her Gypsy heritage and follow her desire to draw.

Problems created by this:
There is familial pressure to practice her mancys when she’d rather be drawing or pursuing her art.
There are constantly family members rushing in at inopportune times to warn her of danger
Her creative mind is very good at making connections, and so she often says exactly the wrong thing at the wrong moment to the wrong person.
She is a gifted fortune-teller and is highly sought after by clients or friends of clients, and she has to keep dodging people.
She is often criticized for wanting to leave the Gypsy life.
Her family is often in trouble with the police for “tricking the public”

How’s that for a list, Jim?

The closest one would be the “creative mind” one. So how about this:

MaryBeth’s accurate prognostications have her saying the wrong thing at the wrong moment to the right person.

Only reason I changed that last is because you would probably want to connect the prognosticating with the person or thing she is prognosticating about. Does that make sense?

Yes it does. When I said wrong person, I didn’t mean it literally. More like the person it would be most inconvenient for her to be telling the future for.

I’m content with that and we can go on to Prish now. Thank you everyone for your extraordinary patience. I hope next time my turn rolls around it’s not on the weekend :stuck_out_tongue:

Is it all right to ask what she is steadfast in? It might help me. thanks, Prish

In my view, she is steadfast in a couple of things…

She is steadfast in her belief in the mancy’s (Tasse, Tarot, Rune, Palmistry, Auras)
She is also steadfast in her belief that is not the life for her, she wants to draw (be an animator)

I assume we are going with her determination to be an animator, since this is about a woman animator making good in the field.

I am so sorry. I cannot find a record of the message I sent to Jim. I guess instead of sending it to him I did not send it to him and it vanished. There must be a delete and vanish option. Sorry for holding things up here. I put the following as options, then Sam had a very good idea of a funny motto option. Then I got to thinking that maybe I could have the CONCERN: Memorizing a Particular Group’s Motto as a trade off like how we do the archtypes trade off. Does that make sense? Maybe we could have her work on different things to memorize?

Here is what I had before:

CONCERN: Memorizing a Particular Group’s Motto

1.  MC struggles with memorizing the Romani language, something she avoided growing up wanting to be an American, so she can think and speak what the leaves are saying.  She thinks the predictions will have more power that way, and she could help the animator business succeed.    The co-workers keep humming and singing jingles at work, impeding her concentration.  Most are muttering and humming Sunny Side of the Street, which is always playing across the street from her family’s Coney Island spot.  It interferes with her concentration for reasons to be developed later.

2.  The Hallmark slogan as before, etc.

3.  MC wants to speak the tea messages in Romani.  MC struggles with memorizing the Romani language because her mother and her paternal grandmother speak different dialects.  They blame each other for her not learning Romani.  She cannot decide which one to follow.

4: MC kept doing lots of tea leaves readings until she, until she got one that said it was a good thing for her to work with traveling/moving drawings and now she has to memorize how to say them in Romani to her family so they will support her new vocation.  She needs to do this to convince them to help her and the Fleischer Studios, financially, since they are rich with stashed family gold.

5: something else

6: Also, including Sam’s suggestion http://discuss.dramatica.com/t/fleischer-studio-s-motto/77

regarding motto
motto:  a short sentence or phrase chosen as encapsulating the beliefs or ideals guiding an individual, family, or institution. synonyms:     maxim, saying, proverb, aphorism, adage, saw, axiom, apophthegm, formula, expression, phrase, dictum, precept; slogan, catchphrase, mantra; truism, cliché, platitude

Bump. Prish’s updated answer didn’t show up for me as a new post.

When I click the link in #6 I get a message that I don’t have access to that topic. I meandered about on the site trying to find that topic thinking it was because I hadn’t viewed it before (?) and couldn’t find it at all. I’m about as lost on this site as I am in Dramatica…

I think Prish provided a link to a private discussion between her and Sam.

Prish, can you narrow it down to one selection that you like.

Same here. Probably a result of editing, posting, deleting and then reposting. Thank you for pointing this out.

Since we are doing a comedy, I pick 4 because it is playful.
CONCERN: Memorizing a Particular Group’s Motto

MC kept doing lots of tea leaves readings until she, until she got one
that said it was a good thing for her to work with traveling/moving
drawings and now she has to memorize how to say them in Romani to her
family so they will support her new vocation.  She needs to do this to
convince them to help her and the Fleischer Studios, financially, since
they are rich with stashed family gold.

I’m having trouble reading this as a Concern…just in one sentence – how is memorizing a particular group’s motto a concern for her? The memorizing is an important part of it and should be the source of trouble. In an earlier post you were saying that people “muttering and humming the Sunny Side of the Street” as making it hard for her to concentrate. That might be a Conscious or Contemplations Concern but not a Memorizing concern.

Sorry to keep beating this one, but if the storyencoding does not accurately reflect the Concern then it won’t work in the end. And I hope others find some value/learning in this as well. I hope no one feels the pressure to be right or super clever with this – it’s supposed to be a learning exercise to help writers understand how to use Dramatica to help craft a story.

So these can be simple one sentence encodings–maybe her therapist taught her a memorization technique to overcome her fear of heights and she can’t memorize her company’s popular advertising slogans of the 1930s - “When you care enough to send the very best” or “Step out with a Stetson”. Maybe she looks like a fool when she heads out for a smoke and keeps saying “Step…step…step in…step out with…gosh darnit, what was it again?..step out with a stepson?” ARGH! and then she runs back in – this would all translate to: Marybeth gives into her fears and embarrasses herself when she can’t memorize her company’s ad slogans. The memorizing is an actual concern–it creates inequity. She would be doing it in the office, in the bathroom, in the elevator, on the street, in the subway. That kind of thing.

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(Scratch the previous)
How about
CONCERN: Memorizing a Particular Group’s Motto
Marybeth gives into her fears and embarrasses herself when she can’t memorize her company’s ad slogans because they are always about “going higher” than anyone and/or anything.

Wasn’t it was supposed to be best to tie it into the reading tea leaves?

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Don’t be sorry, Jim. This is so valuable–at least it is to me. I’m glad we are keeping all the tries on the board so we can see where we need to grow. Thank you. :wink:

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It could be, but you don’t actually have to tie it to any of the other storytelling–the appreciations will tie them together by virtue of them being appreciations (connected through the storyform). You could say she’s concerned about memorizing the Campbell’s soup ad and that would end up tying up nicely with her accurate prognostications of others and her fear of heights. It seems separate at first, but the farther we get the more you’ll see how well they connect together.

Either way - GREAT encoding, I’ll plug it in and we’ll move on to the next… @jamjam1794 you’re up!

I’d like to join. As I said on the Google+ discussion, I’ve been doing some sandboxing with DP and would love to see how this all works.

Sounds great! I’ll add you to the list!