Wow, that’s great! Adding it…@Writegeist your turn!
I’m on it… Let me just pull a rabbit out of this hat…
It’s Wabbit Season!!!
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I was going more for a Bullwinkle
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MAIN CHARACTER CRITICAL FLAW: Having Status. MaryBeth is determined to succeed on her own merits rather than falling back on the money and influence of her rich parents. However, when things get exceptionally tough, it is all she can do to not get in touch with family to solve the problem for her.
Is that the idea?
I like this. Wouldn’t she fall into using her family’s money to solve problems, sometimes, if it is a flaw? Maybe it is a flaw if it inhibits her animation production?
Don’t know if it matters, but I thought we established earlier that Marybeth came from a family of Romany fortune-tellers — whether they got wealthy from this was not discussed.
So maybe Marybeth’s status “flaw” has to do with the fortune-telling somehow? Or maybe with her low status among the caricaturists on Coney Island?
I’m just trying to keep hold of some of the threads that earlier posts have laid in, if that’s worth anything…
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Did I throw something out there about them possibly having lots of gold, being Roma and having seen tv plots about lack of banking, etc? It was just a possibility out of a lot of them, but I thought it wasn’t picked up. They could have a lot of money, though. I can’t see her having a low status, though, since the Roma have always had fantastic charisma, and this is a romantic comedy. Also, this was just before WWII with all kinds of exciting undercover possibilities considering what was happening to the Roma overseas.
@Writegeist great example!! I’ll add it to the story points sometime tomorrow. @MWollaeger if you’re going to answer his questions/challenges can you please do it another thread? You can break it off into another thread by clicking on the icon in the upper right of his message and starting a new thread post there? I want to make sure the discussion here remains in the actual creation of the story.
And @keypayton I wouldn’t worry so much about keeping it all together. Remember that your interpretation of the story might not be the same as everyone else’s. As long as it fulfills the story point(Appreciaton) it will all work out in the end.
Next up is me! Hmmm…
Ok, here’s my take on MaryBeth’s Main Character Resolve: Steadfast:
Having spent her entire adult life huddled and bent over a small desk within an interior cubicle, Marybeth now occupies a corner office. Instead of taking advantage of the floor-to-ceiling windows, Marybeth shifts her desk towards the center of the room and wheels her chair around so as to avoid the view. With her back to the window, Marybeth gets down to business–the vast New York City skyline bustling behind her.
@jassnip you are up!
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Nice one, Jim — great end point for the MC Throughline!
Sorry, I’ve been lax today. A bug got me with fever and the whole shebang…I’ll try and post something in the morning when my head is a little clearer. Thank you for your patience.
Okay… I took MC Signpost 1.
Marybeth fancies Barclay Linton. He’s promised he can get her off coney island and into Fleischer Studios. And they must absolutely discuss this over dinner at a fancy restaurant. Barclay is auditioning Marybeth for a wife, unbeknownst to her.
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Relationship throughline
INHIBITOR: Gathering Evidence for Someone
Marybeth and Sebastian need to get information about who are the sources for mafia-backstory information some animators used as they began edgy gangster characters and stories, similar to the 1930’s gangster films.
It could be for a government agency, local police force, the mafia itself, or a combination of all. I guess I have to decide if they are being forced/coerced into doing so. That was my first instinct. However, maybe they could be desperate to help someone.
@jassnip - wonderful! I added it to the story.
@Prish - the Relationship Inhibitor needs to slow down the development of the relationship between MaryBeth and Sebastian. Since this is a Romantic Comedy one would assume that their relationship is romantic. How does gathering evidence for someone decrease the conflict in their relationship? If you need a reminder, read over what their Domain is so you can get a good idea of what is going on between them.
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I have a hard time seeing the inhibitor as
“slow down the development of the relationship between” them YET that
meaning “decrease the conflict in their relationship”.I would think the relationship inhibitor means increasing the conflict.any info so appreciated…also, how about this:Relationship throughline
INHIBITOR: Gathering Evidence for Someone
Number One Possibility:
Sebastian is coerced by somebigshotagency into getting evidence against one of
the Roma who is selling mafia-backstory information to some animators
for edgy gangster characters and stories. Marybeth does not know about
the mafia investigations and thinks he considers the Roma against the
proletariat.
Number Two Possibility:
Sebastian needs to get evidence for the Urban Planning Commission that the
offices in their building and the boardwalk and stalls on Coney Island
are made with substandard materials provided by somebigshotcrooks. He
helped workers get those jobs, and when the defects cause problems,
those workers will get the blame, unless the evidence forces
somebigshotcrooks to replace materials. Marybeth is concerned maybe he
is going after the Roma and not the truth.
Or does the inhibitor decrease the interaction between them?
You can read about the Relationship Story Inhibitor to find out more about it. Your examples are really complex and hard to follow. I would try and scale back a bit on the amount of storytelling and stay with the actual Appreciation. Keep it simple. A sentence or two at the most.
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Relationship throughline
INHIBITOR: Gathering Evidence for Someone
Sebastian has to leave the building and animation work sometimes to deliver the evidence.
or
Sebastian will not leave his desk when he waits for someone to pick up the evidence.
or
Sebastian runs around placing the evidence in hiding places for pick up.
Are these on the right track? Would something else be better?