Thanks for your input everyone.
Re Change or steadfast, I ran across this passage in the Dramatica Theory book, “Change or Steadfast character is defined by their motivation. Does Jamie remain steadfast to his motivation or change?”
Re my story being a downer, ha ha, you’re completely correct. With the limited amount of info I gave, yes it does come off as a downer. So how about this. I’ll give a touch more context and feel free to tell me where you think this story sits… because I feel I might be missing the mark slightly.
More story context… (I’ve not got the Dramatica language solid yet, so bear with me and my crude terms.)
My story, summary of context.
This is sci fi story. MC is from Earth, but woke up one day elsewhere in the galaxy. The day before he disappeared from earth, he discovered he was going to be a Daddy.
He has two core values (1) a strong sense of family and (2) a sense of belonging to home on Earth. His Goal is to get back home to earth—this will satisfy both of his core values (family and belonging). It’s easier to flip this second point and say, being in space (away from Earth) does not give him a sense of belonging.
Meanwhile, a rogue force is sweeping through the galaxy consuming planets. Planetary governments contract Antagonist to study and stop this entity. But after years of studying, Antagonist has nothing to show. His only hope is to apprehend MC. (Why, because MC is the only person in the galaxy who knows how to get the answers the Antagonist needs (I won’t bother you with how that works, but the rationale is solid.)
MC chooses to sell his information (details the entity consuming the galaxy) in exchange for a “long-shot chance” of finding Earth. However, every day that the galaxy goes without MC’s information, more planets are consumed and the people on those planets are “potentially” hurt. This is a price MC is willing to pay to get back home.
The story follows MC as he races across the galaxy to get to the informant that he will trade his information with I exchange for a “long-shot chance” of finding Earth. In the story, the Contagonist comes to MC for help. The Contagonist’s needs keep getting greater and greater to the point MC has to abandon her in her time of need (she is about to walk into a fatal trap set by the Antagonist in his efforts to catch the MC), otherwise he will miss his only chance of finding earth.
In the climax, MC is given other information: the Contagonist is his daughter. Now, MC has to choose between his core values. F he peruses earth, he’ll gain his sense of belonging, but his negligence will have hurt his family. (or) If he helps his daughter, he will miss his opportunity to ever return home to Earth, thus never have a sense of belonging. To this point, many people have been hurt or harmed due to MC’s decision to return home rather than staying and
So, of the cuff, I think my themes are:
• The needs of the one v/s the needs of the many
• Too much focus / Losing objectivity
Final point: my IC is not well developed. I’m torn between which other characters (player) to use. In fact, I’m hoping that if I can map my MC througline, then I can use the software to dictate what I need in terms of an IC.
Sorry, this has been rather long winded, but I’m open to any and all feedback. I value honesty, so don’t worry about offending me.